My Hip Hop Generation and Women Snippet...

Critique of Artist

After four weeks of intense training and guidance this hip-hop artist is starting to come into his own writing and posting a lot of useful and meaningful information, songs, and poetry on his blog in his journal. He has created some great pieces titled “Unfinished….”, and his hot new poem “It’s me...” He is not scared to showcase his talents on stage, he isn’t afraid to do that. The artist said, “I really have learned to make something personal and I try to give something everyone will enjoy and really take something from each piece I write.” In this new video that the artist just did he wanted to send a message out to his own hip-hop generation. The performer did a good job with his message talking about how the messages that Hip-hop sends needs to be more positive then negative. He mainly talked about how the lyrics of today which needs to speak more positively about women. In his video a suggestion that I have is that maybe he could’ve looked more into the video camera and really get the audience engaged with what he was saying. He did a good job with the deliverance and captured the audience with his voice. In his original piece he talks about hip-hop generation how it has changed from old to new. I think he brings up a question about this genre is, “Can Hip Hop Be Resurrected?” Hip-Hop is dead for quite some time now, just like Nas stated in Hip Hop Is Dead that was released in December 2006. Can it be resurrected? It sure doesn’t sound like it when you turn on the radio. What used to be vibrant, exciting and groundbreaking music just appears like facade now. The only topics that are being discussed in the past years are “bling bling”, “how many guns you have”, “how many cars you have”, “Ho’s”, “Laffy Taffy”, “Lip Gloss”, “Chicken Noodle Soup” etc. So what happened to rap music? How did rap devolve form its glorious past from what even some founders believe is its least motivated period? One of the many reasons for that is the commercialization in music, today; artists want money and fame for their talent, instead of actually using their talent as an art. Back in hip-hop’s glory days of the ‘80s and early‘90s, to artist like Public Enemy, Rakim, KRS-One, Wu-Tang Clan and the list is endless. Despite the different approaches they seemed to somehow talk about something meaningful. In this video that was posted, the artist did a good job talking about how hip-hop today needs to be changed to speak a more meaningful message to people but especially to women. I know that if these rappers keep calling women these names then they justify the fact that everyone else can call them these degrading names. I feel that this artist can do big things for the upcoming year. His words speak knowledge, which gets people to think very critically about the world. I think that he can really get people to change and improve the world’s overall function. I also see that he like to bring comedy and a lot of personality to his story, so I am excited for this artist future work.

Unfinished...

...They keep us depended like infants with chains on our feet and shackles on our mind
When I write rhymes I throw life lines
There is no reason for sharing if I can’t tell into my soul and use my painful past to compose a rose to give a teary 12 year old girl to show her that someone really cares about her
She doesn’t need jump in out of different cars and maybe I can encourage her to start get in and out of bigger books
What she holds in between her thighs is precious enough to hold until she dies unless she finds a man fit enough in her eyes for that prize
There’s no reason for no open mic reading if no poet won’t stand up here and talk about our brethren
They designed this economic and education system to keep Negroes depend like infants
Liberation is never given liberation is won so your colonizer they freed u none they just uses the confidence of capitalistic gains to keep u numb just like they give u religion, education, entertainment to keep u gum
See slavery days present day aren’t that much different in many ways,
see in todays society I am boxed in behind walls of poverty and denial,
I am chained to whatever is leftover in this society,
Brick by Brick the blocks get thick and I have gone to damn far to quit,
And come so close to get what I want and feel I do deserve,
I am stuck between second class, second race, and second rate,
Who but they determine my outcome my fate,
See I want to deliberate the weight of Jim Crow,
But does Jim Crow knows that I am trying to pry myself free,
By way of opportunity,
See opportunity is the key that opens all door,
Opportunity gives you the chance to advance while the world takes a glance,
And we need to get them to see our point of view or stance,
Se were are oppressed and need things to change because life ain’t so easy,
Let’s not ignore what they have been doing to us for so long,
And this struggle exists and I feel will be lifelong if we aren’t strong,
How would they like it if they worked on a cotton mill against their will and there was no such thing as free will,
Let’s place them in chains and see how they like being beaten with so much pain,
Not just physical but also mentally, see how they like it,
Cause see slaves had no freedom and rights and see if ever a black man wanted to hit a white girl right,
HA he would surely be in a fight for his life and end up dead with his dick cut off and place right into his mouth and be placed on display throughout the whole night
I’m just saying things need to be changed with some commodity exchange with ideas either being fired at close range or far like at a driving range, (I’m just saying)
If you got any ideas say it loud and proud, because I will because I know I’m willing to stand up and help put those ideas into action, and make moves to improve the world’s overall function...

It's me

I'm 5 foot 6 attitude cocky
like 50 cent taking rick ross's girl out for some ice cream
i'm not the typical kid who writes about hardships,
life in boces with mom's and dad's getting divorces,
i'm a military brat, that's what I is,
a kid born in Pensacola, Florida,, with 2 sisters and a brotha
at the age of one we moved to queens new york,
flushing to be exact 45 25 bowne street was were my house was at,
i went to ps24 round the blcok, kids of different races and brackgrouds running and what not,
we then move to MI, michigan baby thats where I was at, went to school which was at first kind of wack,
all white no diversitty around my block, games consisted of tic tac toe, racketball, hockey, and golf,
there was no b-ball at the park after dark,
i reall saw forms of discrimination at my school,
cause everyone thought my family was a fool,
cause me my brohter and sister were like the token black kids in the neighboorhood,
but that strived us to do better then the rest and do better then them on every test,
I was the one in my family who tried to make everyone laugh, by entertaining them I was a fool,
doing dumb stuff like pretending I was part of the heartbeats in my living room,
Sometimes I was out of line, acting worse then I was nine,
and mom and dad had no problem letting my behind know,
and at times it felt good to rest my ass in the snow,
they say well they loved me, and thats why they hit me,
but damn that was a lot of loving they was giving me

Self Destruction

The Stop the Violence Movement was formed by rapper KRS-One in 1988/1989 in response to violence in the hip hop and black communities. During a Boogie Down Productions and Public Enemy concert, a young fan was killed in a fight; galvanized into action, KRS-One founded the Stop the Violence Movement. Comprised of some of the biggest stars in contemporary East Coast hip-hop, the movement released a single ('Self Destruction') in 1989 with all proceeds going to the National Urban League. All the media focused on was the negative aspects of rap and Hip-Hop music which downplayed a lot of political rappers, who talked about making change happen. This song focuses on the changes that need to happen within the Black community or they will lead themselves to, as they say in the song, "self-destruction". The violence needs to stop and there are a lot of rappers on this track talking about things that need change. So think that the media should also focus on the positive aspects of Hip-hop which it so rarely does.

This is hilarious

When we did the jump in, step back introduce yourself, and I remember seeing this funny comedian ricky smiley do it and it's hilarious a must see for everyone.

Kid like tendencies lol

I feel like this is a kid like rhyme but hey its what I'm rockin right now:

I'm rough, I'm tough never pullin a bluff,
I turn a hard rocker into a cream puff,
got rhymes, got rhymes gettin betta wit time,
hit so many def lines you got to rewind,
play it back listen, observe my raps cause my lyrics are strong and its like that,
As long as moneys flowing everything thing is legit cause all the honeys want to do is be on my tip,
uh my man supplying a beat that makes people wanna get out their seat and move their feet,
Word is bond and i'm fresher than sean jean in a new apartment,
i like what I do this is just for you, i spit these few lines,
at a dorp of dime i got mad fans that will soon will be mine, hey